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 Tema posta: a tale
 Post Poslato: 29 Dec 2007 00:53 
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procitajte i recite sta mislite, ako vam se svidi, postovacu jos neke slicne stvari:

All alone,
Now.
Nothing, nowhere, none.
I’m fine, really. No need for that.
I’m fine.
Actually, I would like another wine.
Pour it, friend, and sit with me.
Hear a tale of a love.
A tale of death.
her death.
come on.
everybody's dying.
No need for crying.
I’m fine.
Just listen.
Did you heard the wind?
That’s her.
Do you hear the water dripping?
That’s her.
Do you see this hole inside me?
That’s her.
That's her more than anything else.
Pour it. Don't give me that look.
Just let me finish.
Let me finish this tale.
Just let me close the book.
Just listen to this madman and his tale.
That’s right.
It is true what people say.
I am mad. Unpredictable.
Murderer on the run.
Possession of a gun.
I won't harm you.
Perhaps, maybe not.
You are worried about the gun?
There is only one bullet left.
And I don't think it's your time, yet.
Or is it, son?
Let me continue.
I won't talk about how we met.
I won't talk about that day.
Instead I will talk about her death.
It wasn’t love. It was something else.
Something different.
I couldn’t live knowing that she is somewhere else.
Not near me.
I was a fool.
Such a fool.
Pour it.
She was beautiful.
She is beautiful.
Her face engraved in my mind.
Destroying me from the inside.
That dark hair, dark as night.
Dark as sin.
Her lips, so sweet.
Her blood, so red.
Her blood...
Yes. I killed her.
I killed myself then, too.
Pour it.
Tonight we mourn her.
We will mourn this dying world.
And in the morning...
Who will say what morning will hold.
I was there.
She told me to do it.
She said that she can’t live no more.
I said that I can’t live without her.
I said that I couldn't do it.
One look in her eyes and I was on my knees.
She had a gun.
She said please.
Pour it.
Cops are here? Great.
What are they drinking?
Give them something, I’m paying.
Just be quick, there is a tale to be told.
The tale.
Just pour it.
She said she can’t live with the shadows anymore.
She said it is all over.
She said she hates me.
She…
She died.
I reached for the gun.
I was too late.
The shadows have won.
Her blood, so dark, so red.
Just like mine.
Just like the wine.
Pour it.
It’s dawn in couple of minutes?
Great. I’m done.
Just say the price and I'm off.
You want to hear the end?
She died. He died.
Everything dies in the end.
The end.
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jedine negativne kritike, do sada, sam dobio od devojke koju ne mogu da pogledam u oci a da ne pozelim da udarim nesto. (najcesce zid)


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 Post Poslato: 29 Dec 2007 01:13 
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Od cele autorske poezije na ovom forumu, meni se ovo bas dopalo. Ovo je prava dramska poema (naravno ne bas vrhunska,ali za pocetak odlicno), kakve je pisao Robert Browning, potrazi na netu My Last Duchess, The Bishop Orders His Tomb at Saint Praxed's Church i druge. On je po meni jedan veliki umetnik i poznavalac nijansi ljudskih karaktera, posle Sekspira, sigurna sam da bi ti se dopao.
Ima par gramatickih greski, Did you HEAR, ne HEARD. Ostale mogu proci, cak su i pozeljne, zbog kolokvijalnog govora.

Naslov me podsetio na The Rhyme(tada Rime) of the Ancient Mariner, od Kolridza, a isto tako ima i spooky atmosferu :)

Samo tako nastavi :)

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I, da, malo ne zvuci smisleno: Nothing, nowhere, none...

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Nije lose... :thumbup:

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Divno!
Kada se unesesh u atmosferu pesme i neprimetish greshke.
Prozivela sam ovo....

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